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[Opinions] Wittenburg Family (Fictional)
Many years ago, I wrote a story about a little orphan boy who has a sucky life at an orphanage, forced to do chores while all the other kids have fun and go to parties and whatnot. He still manages to remember his birth family and tries to find a way to reunite with his birth family. Even though his family gave him up for virtually no reason (seriously!). The story ends with him getting kicked out of the orphanage, traveling back to the place where he originally came from, and eventually reunited with them and lived happily ever after. The opening page is where he listed his name and all his family members, as seen below.Child's name: Cody Victor WittenburgParents: Katrina Ramona Agnes Elliott Wittenburg & Jacob Andrew Stephen Wittenburg (Elliott is her maiden name)Uncle: Robert Thomas Joseph WittenburgSister: Mary Polly WittenburgFirst Cousin: Edward José BeringFirst grandfather: Martin Lucas Xavier WittenburgFirst aunt: Geraldine Mary Joan Elliott (mom's sister)WDYT?——
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It depends what era your story is set. If it is set in the 1800s or early 1900s,then the names are fine. But if your story is set in the modern era, I'd consider choosing some more recent names for Cody's family.
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Cody Victor: names are fine, but don't really go together. And Victor paired with the LN, Wittenburg, doesn't at all. If keeping the LN, I'd replace Victor. Cody Wittenburg sounds really nice. Katrina Ramona Agnes Elliott Wittenburg: An absolute mouthful, even with Elliott Wittenburg being the LN. Perhaps get rid of the maiden name, or use Katrina Agnes E. W, or Ramona Agnes E. W instead? (Katrina Agnes sounds really good together, IMO)Jacob Andrew Stephen Wittenburg: Not much to say for this one really. J.A.S sounds really well together, and even goes with the LN. Mary Polly: I don't like this one at all. The names aren't the problem (in fact, Polly was my late mother's name, so I have sentimental attachments to it) but they just sound silly paired together. Edward José: Decent enoughMartin Lucas Xavier: I really like this one for some reason. Changing the combo around would also sound great. Martin Xavier Lucas, Lucas Xavier Martin for example. But MLX is solid too. Geraldine Mary Joan: Decent enough-sound wise. Don't care for Geraldine or Joan, but this combo works.
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I love mum's name and aunt's named, dad and uncle's name are nice too. But the child and his sister hshould have better names.
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I agree with the sister one; I was thinking of renaming her Paige. Cody's name will stay as is.

This message was edited 6/30/2022, 6:02 AM

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